protoViolence - Definitive Edition
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ABSTRACT:
All documents enclosed relate to ██. ██████ and █████████’s history within the Youth Training and Development Initiative (YTDI)’s child cybernetics and processing program. Unauthorized release of any information constitutes an unacceptable risk to STOP’s reputation and will result in immediate termination and potential incarceration.
These documents were recovered from STOP backup servers from previously corrupted data. They pertain to the incident that occurred at YTDI Facility #001 on Oct. 1st, 207█, and record the events from ██. ██████'s first arrival at the facility to the date of the incident.
All further information is within the included program.
IDENTIFIED PERSONS:
██. ██████
A senior researcher at STOP with a 20+ year career in cybernetic biology. Among other accomplishments, established the Inverse Synchronization Theory that the YTDI was founded on. At the time of the incident, she was conducting a case study on Trainee C0-458.
It is believed at this time that ██████ entered the YTDI with the intention of dismantling it from the inside, before ultimately █████████ ███████ █████ and ███████ ███████ ████████████ with C0-458.
Trainee C0-458
A trainee housed at Facility #001, and the subject of ██████’s case study. Showed a notable inability to complete assignments prior to ██████████. Following multiple ██████████s, ██████ ██████████ ████████████████████ ██████████.
Dr. Angela Tan
Administrator of Facility #001 at the time of the incident. She has a shared history with ██████.
Trainee S4-174
C0-458’s roommate. Appears multiple times in ██████’s footage.
PROGRAM FEATURES:
- ~2 hours of runtime
- High-quality visual evidence: with blinking, speaking and dynamic camera movements
- Interactive records to explore
- An original, immersive soundtrack
- Partial voice recordings of ██. ██████ and C0-458
- Accessibility options such as image captions, sound captions, and text legibility functions
- One conclusion
CONTRIBUTORS:
Contributors to the development of this program are listed below.
PROGRAM CONTRIBUTORS
- Program Director: Mado- Written evidence: Mado and Brian Mullholland, and new contributors FBFishslap, Siset, and Lilith Chambers. Written evidence recompiled and edited by ALTERLNX
- Interactive records: speck and KigyoDev
- High-fidelity visual evidence: Mado
- Partial voice recordings: Vyn Vox, Adoxographist, and DarlingDonutcat, provided by Phebe Fabacher
- Faithful architectural renderings: Reina
- Program UI: spicaze
- Immersive soundtrack: Melo-dii and Doran
- Audio mastering, SFX design, and voice mixing: D.ray
- Program beta testing: hadestown, Muzozavr, cluniies, and wBrian
This program also uses resources from the following contributors: dmochas, tofurocks, wattson, glsuoa, npckc, Leo-Red, Nighten, and ds-sans.
CONTENT WARNINGS:
This program contains disturbing themes that may be upsetting to younger STOP personnel.
Click the dropdown menu below for a full list.
LIST OF WARNINGS
- Child abuse (neglect, visible body mutilation, bullying, children in explicit emotional distress)- Coarse language
- Blood and gore
- Medical abuse (intentional withdrawal of medication, trauma-induced seizures, human experimentation)
- Violent explosions
The information above has been provided by STOP
Status | Released |
Platforms | Windows, macOS, Linux |
Rating | Rated 5.0 out of 5 stars (28 total ratings) |
Author | Mado |
Genre | Visual Novel, Interactive Fiction |
Tags | Anime, Dark, Female Protagonist, Futuristic, Horror, Narrative, Psychological Horror, Sci-fi, Story Rich |
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Development log
- protoViolence's Anniversary Voice Update is out now!60 days ago
- Support the Violence series on Patreon!Aug 01, 2024
- Help me make more games like protoViolence and take this survey!Jul 19, 2024
- protoViolence's OST is now on Bandcamp!Apr 03, 2024
- Now available on Steam and Itch.io: protoViolence - Definitive Edition is here.Feb 18, 2024
- Release Delayed: protoViolence Definitive EditionFeb 16, 2024
- protoViolence is Coming To Steam.Jan 30, 2024
- Give your input on protoViolence's future (among other things)!Oct 29, 2023
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I'm not sure why, but I have an issue with the Steam version. It's not launching- looks like I'm missing the Steam game executable. I was still able to open the folders and launch the game without Steam, but I won't be able to leave a Steam review. Anywho...
I had a great time reading this!! The art, the music, the writing... Everybody did a great job!! The feeling of suspense was great. I thought the format itself was charming, the various parts of the story being separated by notes/computer/phone & whatnot.
oh, i've just fixed that issue. sorry, that was a problem on my end! i needed to fix some filenames. if you're planning on leaving a steam review, you should be able to now.
anyway, i'm glad you enjoyed this vn! the epistolary parts are great, aren't they? :3c
I left a comment yesterday on MalViolence and i couldn't get the thought away so i decided to play to this today.
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Honestly this game felt like a punch. I knew what would happen and yet. It hurt. SO MUCH. You were right when you said that i'd be satisfied with this game considering i loved Dr Danger. I LOVE LOOOOVE HER. Her struggles felt real, her pain and hope, her anger... She felt very relatable with her fear to actually start something that will change so much of her life. Idk, she was so well writen imo. And you know what fucks me up the most? To know someone that loved Pavel so much isn't there anymore. I actually cried when I put all the pieces together, to think she took care of him the way she did. Thinking of the photos in Malviolence and the prosthesis she made for him. SHE CARED HIM SO MUCH!!!
And Pavel. He made me cry too. I related a lot with him. I used to be a kid that was pushed by their peer, that was seen like a burden to some. So his experience did hurt. I wanted to hold him the whole game, and him trying to stay positive ;_______; ough my heart. The first surgery scene really broke my heart. Genuinely screamed a NOOO.
I feel a lot regarding these two's relationship. I love them so much and thinking of them living together. ;^; gah! I will be rotating these two in my brain for a long time.
I really liked this game, the presentation is great, the art is amazing and the ost works wonders! I also really enjoyed how the story telling was done, with different days showing different aspects thru Dr Deidre's POV. Honestly a really cool way to tell this story, and it did make the medical aspect even stronger imo! I am SO curious with what will happen to the other characters in that universe, especially Pavel's friend, genuinely you and your team created something really great. 10/10 would cry again. Also Pavel is now my sonion (onion son)
Thank you for playing protoViolence!
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I'm happy that Deidre's relationship with Pavel/Cautionne was strengthened for you here. When me and my team were developing protoViolence, we really wanted the game to add meat to their bond, something that was only briefly discussed in malViolence. So I'm glad all of us delivered on that front, as well as making the VN an immersive, cinematic experience.
If you're curious about Cautionne's story and where it'll go next... please stay tuned! I am working on things behind-the-scenes. :3c
hoooo wow. It's been so long since a visual novel has immersed and taken me on this much of an emotional ride. It is so, so cinematic and professionally made. Yet another one of these things that I feel I shouldn't have had the privilege of experiencing for free, but alas, I'm glad I did. Came into this expecting a slice of life adventure dark comedy like, scp/lab-like short story, and my expectations were far far exceeded.
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The music, though I don't often tend to notice it as much, I can say certainly did WONDERS for the mood of the game. What I really noticed was the directions taken with art and atmosphere. The artstyle, though relatively consistent, did not remain stagnant in the slightest. It perfectly mirrored the realisations of the MC, starting out bright, clean and polished, only to become gradually dim and grey and the grim reality set in. One thing that I really thought exhentuated the more horrific, tense and story climax parts towards the end was the simplistic, black red and yellow sharply boldly coloured framing. I'm no artist nor do I study it, but I can certainly say it achieved it's goal and felt really, really atmospheric.
The voice acting was great, and super emotional. While I'm not one to be particularly fond of children, let alone motherly, Pav's crying monologue post-seizure really tugged at my hearstrings. No kidding, I almost actually bawled; teared up. In the playtime, the story feels perfectly paced and it really feels like you're just taken on this journey with the narrative. I also quite enjoyed pondering the wider philosphical takes on the nature of medical/scientific ethics, and quite enjoyed how, for a little while in the beggining, we too were lulled into this false sense of justification for the organisation. Also much appreciated the bitterly realistic acknowledgement that, no matter what MC did, they could never truly win against a big government funded organisation. They couldn't ever save each and every child.
All in all an immensely impactful experience that had me taking a moment to just. Let settle for a little while post-play. And that's a deep-reaching impact not many games manage to achieve for me. 5/5
Thank you for the incredibly kind words (and thoughtful analysis) on protoViolence! I'm glad it left such a big impact on you. ;w;
I don't know if you've played it yet, but if you're curious to find out what happens next with Pavel and Deidre... protoViolence does have a sequel.
FINISHED THE GAME AND EUGHHHHH I HAVE THINGS TO SAY
(spoilers in this comment though !!!)
First of all slay Dr. Deidre for this. Like yes become a villain for that boy you consider your son now (at least that's how I see it). Fight the system girl. Yes even if it's with bombs. MAKE YOUR VOICE HEARD-
ON A MORE SERIOUS NOTE THOUGH this was very different from malViolence (which I played first) and also from most visual novels I played. I usually play stuff with multiple choice and several endings, but I have to say I didn't mind it at all ! Probably because I already liked the characters and knew some of the story, but still. Even though the interactive parts were minimal, I mean there were still there- And so yeah. Little point I wanted to raise.
About the story itself : I really liked this addition to the lore and story of Cautionne and Dr. Danger. It helped to understand some things in malViolence better and just well... Gave more context in general. And well I learned a lot about Dr. Danger as well.
I wanted to comment on a specific moment in the game that really impacted me : the one where Pavel/Cautionne reveals his legs after his first precession. Because when he lifted the blanket I thought "oh they probably gave him cybernetic legs huh. guess it hurts poor boy show me-" AND THEN I WAS HIT WITH THE SIGHT OF. NO LEGS AT ALL ?! COMPLETE AMPUTATION ?! Truly the only thing I could do was sit with my mouth wide open, staring at my screen for a good one or two minutes while I was thinking "WHAT. WHAT HAPPENED TO YOU. MY POOR BOY. WHAT HAVE THEY DONE. YOU LEGS. MY BOY. MY POOR BABY BOY. YOUR LEGS-"
Also the seizure scene. I knew it was going to happen at some point but when I actually had to read through it. Aooch. My heart ached and broke. MY POOR BOY PAVEL/CAUTIONNE-
I really loved Shriya character's as well. Wish Dr. Deidre could have taken her with her too. I wonder how she's doing now.
Annnnd I think that's it for my little ramble about protoViolence specifically ? I do have a few more things to say though-
Since we got the beginning of this duo's story and kind of the "end" of it (with Dr. Danger being dead), will we ever get to know what's in between ? Because. I think some found family domestic fluff, eventually hurt/comfort (which I wouldn't mind at all since it's one of my favourite tropes-) would do my poor heart some good. After seeing those poor people suffer so much.
Also, about Pavel's name in malViolence : is "Cautionne" kind of a code name like "Dr. Danger" for Dr. Deidre ? Since Pavel's name seemed so important to him because it kind of symbolised his individuality and identity, I couldn't help ubt ask myself that.
Once again, great game ! Hope we can see more of the Violence series soon :)
Thank you for the kind words!! I'm glad protoViolence left an impact on you.
With your questions... I'll say this. You're not the first person to ask about Cautionne's name, or about what happens in between protoViolence and malViolence. Keep your eyes peeled.
Thanks for the playthrough! o7 Glad you could play through Def Edition.
Yeyeyeyeyes!!!
Played this game after hearing about it from @fbfishslap on X and was fascinated to give it a shot. Absolutely loved it, really good story and well told. Did a full playthrough on my channel if interested. Keep up the good work!
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed protoViolence as much as you did. :>
After being told this game would be up my alley I decided to check it out first thing and wow, this game delivers! It combines some of my favorite aspects I've seen across VNs into one lovely package. I love the type of fragmented storytelling where you can choose what to look into first and it does a great job of dividing the game's content.
The multimedia aspect is great, and everything inside the game is so vivid, in no small part due to that. I am a massive fan of science fiction and this story weaves the futuristic elements of it in with a painfully human story.
The art is FANTASTIC and hits all the beats it needs to-- and the animations give it that extra oomph. And while small, I do love how the desk space changes as the days go on. Really makes the space feel tangible and lived-in.
The voice acting comes in at all the right moments and the performances are stellar. Every emotional beat they hit feels perfect to the scene.
And I can't think of a single line here that doesn't contribute something to the story, characters, setting and/or atmosphere-- the writing is superb.
Music here hits all the right notes and while I'm not a music guy I can definitely appreciate it! They work great establishing the mood of the scene.
Thank you Mado for the recommendation, and thank you to everyone on the team for this game! You all did fantastic. I will definitely have to check out malViolence in the future :)
Thank you so much! I'm very, very glad protoViolence could leave an impact on you like this. ^u^
And please enjoy malViolence when you do come to it... It's a bit different, but I hope it leaves an impact on you too.
I had saved this jam game for later because I figured it would blow my socks clean off, and I was right! Man. Where do I even start?
The writing hooked me from the get-go and did a good job at introducing me to this world and to the role STOP plays in it (I certainly want to check out malViolence now that I played this one!). And the way it escalated!! Starting out so smoothly with only its faint hints that something is off, and then never stopping to ramp up the intensity until its cathartic climax. I couldn't stop thinking that Dr. Deidre and Pavel's story would make my mom bawl her eyes out, it has such a poignant core about how children deserve care and dignity and the freedom to make their own choices - To not have their personality and desires stripped from them. I couldn't help but wonder if Deidre intuitively chose Pavel as a case study subject because his creative and headstrong tendencies reminded her of herself when she was a child.
Everything from the art to the sound design assisted the story's impact, making it a truly cohesive experience. Which is really hard to achieve when working as a team, so huge props for that!! <3
My personal favourites were the animations when Deidre first sees Pavel after his more intense processing, and he reaches out to her, and then the heartwrenching voice performance when Pavel has his emotional break. So cinematic.
10/10, my favourite jam game out of the dozen or so I've played so far. Bravo!!
Thank you for the incredibly kind words! ;_;
I'm glad protoViolence left an impact on you from start to finish. Me and my team did the very best we could to make it an immersive storytelling experience - and I'm glad our efforts paid off for you.
Those moments you mentioned later in the game are some of my favorite too. I spent a lot of time getting those post-processing animations juuuuuuust right - and Adox's performance as Pavel in the last conversation between him and Dee was jaw-dropping in its intensity.
I hope you can check out malViolence after this. There's a lot of love in that game too, haha...
Well, this was one hell of a way to get me interested in MalViolence! The core story is so interesting, and the different ways it was conveyed helped keep me engaged the whole time; switching from research log, to journal, text message and video interview was a really good idea to keep things fresh. It also made it hard to put down! Even when I needed to do something else, I kept thinking, "I'll just see this next one!" ...and before I knew it, I just played through the whole thing! Dr. Deirdre was such a great protagonist, and it was great seeing her grow from someone more or less complacent, believing it was possible to reform STOP from within, to someone willing to take actual action against them. The climax of the story was so tense! Presentation wise, this is top notch stuff! The production values feel so high, I'm amazed that you were all able to complete this in a month! Fantastic UI as well. Great work to the whole team, and I'm looking forward to trying out MalViolence next!
Thank you so much - I'm glad you enjoyed protoViolence - and Deidre as a protagonist. This story was designed to flesh her out as a character, and I'm happy it delivered on that front for you. :>
And it makes me glad to see you like the production values! I really couldn't have done it without the incredible efforts of my team, so I'm glad we were able to deliver something quality in the span of a month, haha.
The story brings up some really good morality conversations. Super well made! Loved the different forms of media that feeds us information and gives us pieces of the story. Definitely interested in going through malViolence after October!
Thank you so much - I'm glad protoViolence could leave an impact on you!
I hope you enjoy malViolence too... :>
Beautiful--fantastic writing and presentation. Amazing characters. This gut wrenching story of a researcher and their struggle to stand up to the forces that have commandeered her research even as she sees the stakes rising like a tide hits SO HARD. I was deeply moved am not ashamed to admit that cried more than once as I played. I was especially impressed at the way Pavil, who seems to be coded as neurodivergent, communicates his feelings, and how we (our individual as well as our collective selves) respond to him really rounds out the themes of the story. I loved how pace starts slow and thoughtful, and by the end it's a dead sprint. Very well done!
Thank you so much - I'm glad protoViolence could move you so deeply.
On Pavel, he's not just neurodivergent-coded: he is autistic! A lot of his experiences in the YTDI are (very) loosely based on my own, haha.
I'm happy you enjoyed the pacing too. I wanted to get it juuuuuust right. ;>
The juxtaposition of the cold, clinical environment and the warm personality of Pavel was done soooooooooo sooooo well! Your team did so well with what to include and what to leave out, telling a story in fragments of video interviews, case study entries, personal notes, and private messages.
The CGs, music, UI, camera work, character designs, all worked together so well. Even the attention to detail to little things like the computer powering up. I’m amazed and in wonder at what a solid, finished piece this is!
Inspiring to say the least!
Thank you so much! I'm very glad you liked protoViolence as a whole, and that you find it inspiring for your future works. :>
Cool overall presentation, really liked the dynamics between classic dialogue box and the one with the text globes. Real fan of how the game achieves this "Something is out of place" feeling through the dialogue, minimalistic places, character interactions, among other, good job on that >:3 !
Thank you so much! I'm very glad you enjoyed this VN's presentation overall. :>
CRIED LIKE A BABY! Fantastic pacing and the art is solid. The backgrounds have that sterile laboratory feel, without just being generic walls and corridors. The character sprites are expressive which makes it easy to get invested.
It's made very easy to adjust to the perspective of the protagonist, who has specialized knowledge that the reader won't have but follows a very clear thought process. Pavel is a very likable kid, relatable to anyone who's struggled with school. It only makes you want things to work out for him so badly....
(SPOILERS) I was really really scared that in the ending it would be revealed that
the chip connected to his brain would also shut off or detonate somehow. Luckily you were kind and gave him a future :,)Thank you so much! I'm really glad protoViolence left a big impact on you - both in terms of the writing and art.
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Also Pavel does very much have a future. In fact, if you want to know what happens to him next... why not try the sequel, malViolence?
I just started Malviolence! Having a wonderful time so far. Thank you so much for the quality puzzles
Thank you!!! I hope you enjoy the full VN!
super polished with a heartwrenching story! really great voice-acting and camera work, too! (and thank you for the content warnings-- super helpful)
Thank you so much for enjoying protoViolence. I appreciate it!
And I'm glad the content warnings could help too. :>
This was incredible from start to finish and I won't lie, I was tearing up at the end. Suddenly lots of the features in MalViolence have even greater depth and I'm already itching to replay it with ProtoViolence in mind! I utterly loved this prequel. The art was also visually stunning and horrifying (in the best way) and I audibly gasped at certain parts. Thank you to the whole team for this incredible project!
Thank you so much! I’m very glad protoViolence left a big impact on you - and I’m eager to see how you’ll revisit malViolence with all this new info in mind…
Oh my STARS this one hits all my soft spots: I adore stories that feature well-intentioned scientific geniuses who end up lost in the sauce, and later attempt to course-correct when their ideas escape their intended scope (gotta love the hot-house flowers that bloom, and then are horrified to find themselves an invasive species!); and as the parent of a child who best thrives when her unique needs are recognized and met, Pavel's storyline absolutely shattered me. The art is simple but stunning, and the cinematography hits the sweet spot for me in terms of adding to the story with life and motion, without subtracting by being unnecessarily distracting and moving for movement's sake alone: there is never any question whose viewpoint the camera represents, nor does it ever seem to shift unnecessarily or to the detriment of the story itself. An extraordinary achievement, particularly given the constraints of the jam--brilliant, brilliant work!
Thank you so much! I'm really happy that protoViolence could leave an impact on you in this way - and that you liked the visual direction as much as you did.
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Pavel's experiences as a neurodivergent child were loosely based off of my own growing up - so I'm glad they resonated with you too. I hope you and your child are doing okay right now...
Really enjoyed pV! Awesome job to you and the team, for the second time! 🎉
So different from mV in many ways, yet so much to love (and despise you for T_T) this time around~:
- Major kudos on the UI, the UI design, the various accessibility features (img descr, audio titles, self-voicing NOT buried in the Controls section, font size+color+line spacing <3), the pop-out quick menu, the CRT lines and screen curving effect, even the menu and initial splash screen login prompt all resembling a computer terminal — it presents brilliantly, while also tying in thematically to the game itself as a STOP employee, and with the computer being used to access the interviews, the most important (interactive) parts of the experience.
My only beef here, and it's quite minor: I wish there were a custom keybind for toggling Auto-Forward, considering RenPy doesn't provide one by default. Leaving the QM open got in the way in certain scenes, so it was a bit annoying opening it to turn on Auto, only to turn it off to enjoy a CG or re-read some lines, then re-open the QM to enable Auto again, etc.
- Love the sprite work, and especially how expressive and emotive Pavel is (espec when you twist the knife later on away from happy expressions :') ).
- The cinematography, animation, use of the 3D camera are phenomenal and really made the experience feel immersive, especially combined with...
- The voice acting, which was really high-quality and well-balanced. The "sound bites" were used tastefully, and with the most impactful lines being voiced, those scenes stood out even more (tugging further at my heartstrings </3).
- Ditto regarding the use and sound balancing of the SFX and music tracks, all of which had great ambience and atmosphere. The music was almost too relaxed and easy-going (intentional choices, I assume >:3 ), which further added to my sense of dissonance and discomfort leading up to the story's climax (especially having played mV, so I knew more or less *what* was coming, just not *how*).
- The point n' click desk sections were a nice touch, along with the phone texting UI and SFX. Great use of alternating between ADV and NVL modes. Also, props on leveraging RenPy's speech bubbles system, considering that's a relatively new feature in 8.x IIRC.
- Regarding the story, I really enjoyed (being hurt by) it! <3 I definitely felt the connection between Deidre and Pavel grow over time, their bond solidifying as she gained his trust, and he her devotion and conviction. It was also excellently painful seeing Pavel, a square peg being jammed by YTDI into their round hole without any thought for flexibility or individuality, not fitting in by mere virtue of being himself — a scenario and challenge I can relate to — with Angie being the embodiment of this rigid adherence to rules and "results" above all else. So those aspects resonated with me, especially seeing Pavel being processed (punished) despite not doing anything severe enough to merit it, and how the cruelty and inhumanity of this becomes the fuel which incites Deidre into action. It logically flows and hits in the feels, which is great!
I do wish y'all had another maybe 2 weeks to spend on the project, because as much as I enjoyed the story, I would have wanted to see more "intermediate" visits with Deidre and Pavel between his first processing and his Nth, e.g. with just the prosthetic legs, then with the legs + brain chip, then those + the arm(s?) and eye, to further build that sense of horror, unease, and dread re: YTDI's lack of moral boundaries (rather than jumping from "Look ma, no legs!" straight to "All the cybernetics1!".
Similarly, I would have liked for Deidre and Angie's final confrontation to have been a bit more fleshed out, although I'm having a harder time pinpointing exactly how or in what way, or what feels lacking or rushed here IMO.
30 days is NOT a lot of time, so I completely understand and appreciate picking and choosing your battles on what to focus on wrt the writing.
The beginning, the climax, and the ending were fantastic, and absolutely delivered though! "Blue..." Who's chopping onions nearby?! T.T
Also, the little throwbacks to mV like the grape-scented stickers and the apartment photo... <3
Again, phenomenal job this time around! (and on finding a much more accessible form of pain and suffering: emotional trauma, instead of puzzles lol)
Thank you so much for this incredible comment - I'm glad you enjoyed it as much as you enjoyed malViolence!
I'm gonna go through everything and give as best of a response as I can, haha.
So - SPOILER ALERT for those who haven't played!
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- The UI is great, isn't it? Huge applause to spicaze, speck and kigyo for making it as beautiful as it was in the end. Spicaze made all of the elements, and speck and kigyo put them all together. Overall, I think they really added to the feeling of the final game. With the autoforward keybind, I'll see if I can apply one in a later version of this game. I don't think it'll be difficult to do - I just need to raise it with my team first.
- Glad you like the visual side of things too. I worked really hard on the sprites and CGs - and I'm glad they provided that appropriate twist of the knife later on. >:3c I loved creating the camera movements too - it was time-consuming, but very fun to see everything come together.
- Ditto with the voice-acting, music and SFX. Vyn and Adox gave their all with the voice acting side of things, and melo-dii and Doran once again worked wonders with the soundtrack. And to tie everything together, D.Ray did a phenomenal job with mixing + mastering all of the audio, and picking out most of the SFX for the game.
- I'm glad the point n' click sections worked as intended! I think NVL modes are severely underrated in VNs, so I wanted protoViolence to use it for its storytelling. Happy you like the speech bubbles too - they were fiddly, but I'm glad they worked as intended.
- I'm happy the story carried its themes and intended emotions across! I would've loved to write more intermediate visits with Pavel and Deidre. I think in an ideal world, i'd include another visit between the first and second visit in-game, and another between the third and fourth visit in-game... but yes, the one-month time limit for the jam meant that I had to be very strict about the length and scope of my story. Likewise, including more scenes showing the breakdown of Angie and Deidre's friendship would've probably emphasized why the brevity of the last scene between them was important. Though I should note that Pavel's arm wasn't taken off due to cybernetics - it was blown off in the explosion!
Overall, thank you for playing protoViolence and sharing your thoughts and critiques. I really appreciate it!
I am like. So miserable right now lol <-- (I promise this is a compliment)
I work with children on a daily basis, so this story was pretty much engineered to hit me where it hurts... seeing the conditions that the kids endured, the way they were treated by all of STOP's employees, and watching Pavel's horrific transformation from a bright kid to a person broken by all the trauma piled onto him... uh, I am gonna have to try extra hard to be normal when I go to work in an hour LMAOOOOO. In particular, Dr. Deidre's earlier case study critiquing the rigorous schooling and Dr. Tan's comment about "throwing them snacks just to see if they run harder" mirror some of my real-life experiences (in education, not in a child testing lab, thank god) and sort of got my blood boiling haha.
I liked the art a lot - all of it is very cohesive, not to mention extremely well-presented. The combination of speech bubbles, NVL-style text, textboxes, and records combined with the panning backgrounds and the very dynamic sprites made this such a fun and beautiful game to watch.
Overall, I'm so so impressed with how polished this game is for something that was made for a 30-day jam; it speaks volumes of both your prior experience and your clear vision for what you wanted this game to be. There are so many other myriad Thoughts (not to mention vague Feelings that haven't yet become Thoughts) that I want to communicate about what an experience this game was, but I fear that if I tried to get them all down this comment would end up very disjointed and rambly, haha.
Thanks very much for sharing this game, and I'll definitely be checking out malViolence after I've finished with this year's Spooktober entries!
Mwahahaha - protoViolence worked as intended! >:3c
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I'm glad the story impacted you in this way; particularly... everything that happens to Pavel, since his experiences are the emotional crux of the story. I did my very best to make the art/sprites/camera movements as interesting as possible, and I'm glad they delivered for you.
I would love, love, love to hear your further thoughts and feelings on protoViolence if you have the time; I love hearing how the works I've directed are received/perceived by others - but if you don't have the time, I appreciate this comment as-is.
By the way, if you do get to malViolence, - I hope you enjoy it! You might see a familiar face or two...
Absolutely outstanding visuals and haunting story. The speech bubbles make it feel like watching animated series while the various phones chats, logs and diaries add some interesting variety and depth to the story. The cinematography is absolutely amazing! Like seriously, that camerawork must have taken ages to do!
The partial VA really drives the emotions home. I grew really attached to Pavel throughout the story, the characters were amazing with very memorable designs. That whole team did an amazing job!
Thank you for making this game!
Thank you so much! I'm very, very glad you enjoyed protoViolence. The cinematography was definitely time-consuming, but it isn't as hard as many think: Ren'Py's 3D camera and kyoryuukunn's Action Editor plugin both helped immensely. ;>
And I'm happy you like the voiceacting too: both Vyn and Adox did a fantastic job. I also wanna give a shoutout to D.Ray (my sound mixer/masterer) for making them sound as good as they did in the end.
WE ARE SO BACK LAB RATS LET'S GOOOOOO!
Really having played malViolence first I may have known how this story was always going to end, but my god this was a gut-wrenching downward spiral. Beautifully tragic, the descent from clinically pale whites and silvers to black and red, and then yellows and oranges as it all comes crashing down-
The horror is very much in what's happening in the walls of this place, but an underrated second dose of horror comes from watching people justify and later dismiss it, the knowledge that any objections will be quashed not by force but by red tape, and the sheer helplessness of it all-
Warm and fluffy pancakes to Team Violence for all your amazing work!
LET'S GO!!!! LAB RATS ASSEMBLE!!!!!!!!!!!!
Very glad you enjoyed protoViolence as much as you did - especially the horror segments. Thank you for playing!
I do love my horror on the dark side, and I think this is probably the darkest one I've played so far from the jam in terms of the narrative, so thank you for that ^-^ Wonderfully heartwrenching and bittersweet!
This is unbelievably slick and stylish! The art & cinematography are beyond gorgeous, especially in some of those scenes towards the end! Just *chef's kiss* :D
Overall, a fabulous triumph of a VN ^-^ I shall have to check out malViolence someday!!
Oho - a fellow grim horror enjoyer! I see we both have a common interest...
Very glad you enjoyed protoViolence as much as you did. I hope you enjoy malViolence too - it's a lot of fun. ^u^
One of the most cinematic i've seen so far! It felt like I was experiencing an anime before my eyes! The story had a lot of intrigue, and the characters were compelling and very well designed!
The dread inducing moments were gut wrenching but definitely supplied my horror fan sensitivities hahaha.
The sound was also well thought out, the music was on point and the effects really elevated the experience, it is a total package!
Overall great job!
Thank you, thank you! I'm very glad protoViolence could impact you in this way in every aspect.
"Experiencing an anime before my eyes" is the exact reaction I wanted - so that makes me very happy to hear. :>
gosh this was certaintly a rollercoaster emotions and i loved it sm.OH and also pavel deserved better:(
Thank you so much!
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If you, like many of us, think Pavel deserved better - or even revenge for what happened to him... I'm happy to let you know that protoViolence has a sequel. :>
ohh yeyy ill check it out!
What a ride man. I'm literally crying, whyyyyy ;-;
10/10
Thank you! I'm glad protoViolence could impact you in this way...
Already posted a glowing review for this game on the Spooktober submission page, but just gonna repeat my thoughts with a tl;dr again. If you've already played malViolence: this is a great game. If you haven't played malViolence: both it and malViolence are great must-plays. Though I will say I think malViolence should be played first, then this one. I think the reveals & story beats are much better with the sequel's context.
It's been an amazing journey seeing how Mado and their team has developed their skills through their VNs. Absolutely getting five stars across the board from me!
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SCATTERED, SPOILERY THOUGHTS BELOW:
+ The authorization input when you boot up the game is interesting. I only inputted "DEIDRE" so far since I already played malViolence... does it accept multiple answers?
+ GO!!!! uses Amen Breaks. best song in the game
+ "oh man I wish we could see what Deidre looked like in this time.. oh hey look we get a view of her, she looks pretty- oh wait no it's THIS part of the game- oh no fuck"
+ shriya game soon? (insert pleading face)
Thanks again for the wonderful review!
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- Yes, the authorization input does take multiple answers. DEIDRE is one, but try some of the other cast members from protoViolence or malViolence... or even one of the people who developed this game. There's a lot to discover!
- GO!!!! is a great piece. melo-dii (one of my team's two composers) is a big fan of amen breaks, so what better way to put their musical signature than the escape sequence?
- YEAH........ that's rub with Deidre's appearances here. When you do get to see her face, it's uh... in some of the most disturbing scenes of the story. ;w; If it's a small comfort, I did draw a character reference of her a little while ago.
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Full disclosure: While I was reading the setup of the story, I had to stop for a few minutes. I was wondering whether maybe this wasn't the game for me. I wanted to make choices to affect the flow of the plot. I therefore went back to the game's page to double-check the description, only then to realize that there was only one ending. I've enjoyed kinetic novels before, but I have a huge preference for multiple choices and endings. I seriously considered moving on to another game at that point. However, as I was skimming through the comments, I saw highly positive feedback that encouraged me to continue. And I'm eternally grateful that I did!
The distinct and expressive character designs, especially of Pavel, first drew me to download this game. But the entire project just wows on every level imaginable: the fleshed-out worldbuilding; the overall sci-fi/technological aesthetic and graphics; the way the sprites and camera move; the variety in visuals and storytelling formats, including the epistolary portions and the art style that shifts as the situation steadily grows direr; and the great music, sound design, and voice acting. In short, everything in this game is so meticulously planned to snag the player's attention right off the bat and to ensure that they stay engaged the entire way through.
I didn't expect to get so attached to the characters! I teared up not once, not twice, but thrice! And I gasped and cursed to myself so many times. Because I haven't played malViolence yet, I was totally in the dark about the fates of these characters and was filled with more and more dread as the story rapidly barreled toward its high-stakes and action-packed conclusion. Then I was super satisfied by the ending and overjoyed upon reading the extras. I can't wait to check out the sequel now. I'm desperate to learn more about these characters, the challenges they face, and the seemingly dystopian world they inhabit.
This is one of my favorite VNs/KNs in recent memory. Congrats to everybody in the team for delivering such a standout project! You're all incredible!
(Note: Copy-pasting this comment from the Spooktober VN Jam 2023 page.)
Thank you so much for playing protoViolence!
I'm glad you gave it a chance, and I'm happy the game impacted you as deeply as it did. Me and my team did our absolute best to make this project as polished as possible - so I'm glad you think it delivered on that front. Thank you, thank you, thank you!
And I hope you enjoy malViolence. There are multiple endings in that VN - so I think you'll enjoy it a lot too. Just be aware that the puzzles can pack quite a punch!
Took me a while to get around to it because I wanted to wait till I was a little less sick so I could read this with a clear head, and it was well worth it!!
There are many things that stand out to me with this, but I think one of the most obvious words that jumps out to me is 'juice'. There are so many little details in the art, in the UI, in the design, in the just... general EVERYTHING that elevates this from a good game to a jawdropping one. The level of polish on everything really makes things so satisfying, and I loved being able to pick out little details, such as the backgrounds changing between dates (I particularly liked the little mug stains!) or references to malViolence (the stickers...!!)
This game certainly DID whet my appetite for malViolence content, but now I just want to know more things!! I really hope I can hear more about Shriya, she had such an absolutely wonderful design, but for now the team should rest up!! Thank you all for your hard work!
Thank you for the very kind words, Moka! I'm glad you like all the little attentions to detail in the game: my team did their utmost to weave everything together. I'm really proud of how it all culminated in the end.
And I do intend to elaborate on more things introduced in this title - so please look forward to those too in the future. Again, thank you so much!
So, I actually did not play MalViolence (the game this is a prequel for) before playing this VN. I had only seen illustrations from the director, whose artwork I've been a fan of for some time. I have to say, once finishing this game I went straight to Steam to download MalViolence so that I could see what happens next for these characters. I found the story we were shown here that compelling!
This is a tight, well executed, and emotionally gripping story. I was moved deeply by the characters we meet and was genuinely shaken by quite a few of the story beats. The first "shoe drop" moment we're given made me gasp out loud. The way the story is presented to us through the lens of a researcher taking notes, recording interviews, and even texting a friend was very creative and immersive.
I definitely recommend checking out this VN; the couple hours it took to play went by quickly (in a good way). No prior context to who these characters are is needed...though, be warned, you may be left itching or more of them once you're done. :) I look forward to seeing any further work from this team.
Thank you so much for this lovely comment!
I'm very glad protoViolence got you to play malViolence, haha - all part of my greater plan...
'Wow...'
Those are the words that escaped my mouth after I finished this game. Like a tidal way of feelings washing over you, receding, and then letting you revel in what just overwhelmed you.
As a general scardey cat, I'm happy that the horror in this game didn't make me jump and scream. No, instead it made my heart drop into my stomach as dread for what happens and then my hands ball up into fists and my teeth to grind as anger replaces it after events happen and horrifying scenes play themselves out. I won't spoil the ending, but I'd say that if felt anger and rage like I did... hold onto it until the finale.
As mentioned earlier, this game does a great job at slowly filling you up with dread. You know that things aren't quite right, that things are certainly heading towards something sinister, and our protagonists does it as well, and perhaps worst of all we grow attached to someone who will be involved in the culmination of that dread. Until... well...
You see the horrible scenes play themselves out.
I'd say the strength of the game, aside from the slow build of dread is how it shows the multiple ways our protagonist also shows that same sense of dread. How it's handled, how they rationalize it, avoid it, come to terms with it, and ultimately... act upon it. In addition, I think that the game hits on themes that many people may go across in their lives. Power and it's use, the unintended side-effects and consequences of our ambition, and how the road to hell can be paved with great ideas, good intentions, and pure pursuits. But when that resource is exhausted... blood, bones, and suffering will do well.
At some point, you have to decide whether to keep walking, turn away, or dismantle the road itself.
Now with that poetic rambling over with, gotta give mad props to the voice acting. While sparse, it's used expertly well in the places that it appears. It was a pleasant delight whenever they popped up and, naturally, they fit the characters well.
Likewise, the music was fantastic. My favorite is how it plays during the introspective segments, and I believe that it shifts as the game goes on, but that might just be me.
UI is good, and the cinematic use of various parts of the screen, speech bubbles, and even a notebook/phone at times is very clever. Gives some nice dynamics to the game and keeps things fresh, same when interacting with the characters and how the sprites and camera shuffle and focus on various parts to highlight the text.
All this to say... props. This was an amazing game, and an excellent spinoff!
Thank you for the incredible and detailed comment! I'm very glad protoViolence affected you this deeply... And your discussions on the themes the VN has are really lovely too.
Thank you, thank you, thank you!
There is a genuine reason that this page is given a warning when you first open it up. Horror games usually end up trying to shock or scare, but eventually you come down from an intended chemical rush. This is not that.
ProtoViolence is genuinely horrifying in the events that transpire. Whether it's something more obviously graphic or a banal reality that exists today, there are subjects in here that should give you pause.
I highly urge everyone to experience it.
Thank you for this very thoughtful comment, I appreciate it. I'm glad protoViolence made you think a lot with the horrors it presents!
Spoilers inbound!
I finished ProtoViolence a few hours ago and I have so many, many feelings. I'm continually impressed by how this world is presented: whether it's the slow pans or how you, as Dr. Dierdre, can access information, to the voice acting and, of course, the writing. Full disclosure--I'm relatively new to playing games, so it took a bit for me to understand how to progress the story. ^^; (The rule appears to be that the computer is the last thing you can access, and the files + phone can be chosen in whichever order you like.)
That aside, though, I loved the slow build-up to the horror. When I read the warnings, I assumed it would all be in your face right away, but it's...really not. As Dr. Dierdre says, things at YTDI look peaceful and serene. "Look" being the operative word, as it doesn't take long for the real "bleeding edge" of progress to seep through the carefully-controlled margins. The point being: when the horror actually reveals itself, you flinch not because it's some monster beyond human comprehension, but the icy, clinical way that it presents itself. (Until it doesn't, and that art shift is great.) It's what was always going to happen, no matter the kid.
Speaking of kids, let's talk about Pavel, who you will want to spit in A Certain Scientist's eye for. Even knowing Malviolence's story, it still felt like meeting him all over again--as it should, since this is his, dare I say, "origin story" *laughs and cries*. Either you've known a kid like Pavel or you were a kid like Pavel. And the...things...that happen to him (and have happened to others) will make you want to shove A Certain Scientist straight off her ivory tower regardless of where you sit on that binary. Mostly because, well, they're inhumane, but also because they're not unlike how kids with special needs etc. are treated IRL, taken to their extremes. There's even a point where Pavel has a breakdown over it and man. Man. It resonated hard enough that I had to take some time away for a bit.
The real winner for the horror scenes though was easily the one near the very end, mainly because it hit the Unable To Help A Child Despite Being An Adult primal fear button with a vengeance. I literally gasped out loud! Which doesn't happen very often. It was set up beforehand, but it still felt like the worst case scenario in a situation full of worst case scenarios. "Get this kid out of here, Oh god", I kept thinking, even though of course that was already the plan.
And then, several scenes later I gasped again out of sheer, gleeful triumph. "Yes, Pavel, take control back! Run away, BE FREE, AHAHAHA", to give an example of my thought process. XD (I did feel that the other kids' fates were a bit too ambiguous at first? But now that I've had time to think, it fits. Looking forward to maybe seeing a few of them later on! Shriya Reunion Tour when??)
There's a lot to think about here, in a good way. I get the feeling I'll be mulling it over for a long while after this, and not just in the "somehow crossing over with other canons for fun" like I've been daydreaming these past few months post-reading Malviolence. The themes of child abuse and the systems that perpetuate it "for the greater good" are written in a very thought-provoking way here, so it was bound to happen.
(To end this on a lighter note: as an Ant-man fan, I got a kick out of Roach-man. XD And CONGRATS MADO AGAIN!!!)
Thank you for the INCREDIBLE and well thought-out comment!
I really appreciate reading your detailed review of the game. I'm glad a lot of the themes and intended beats of protoViolence came through to you.
Your comments about Pavel and his circumstances especially got me misty-eyed: because that's exactly what I wanted to get across with his character. Thank you, thank you, thank you... (I want to say more but I'm overwhelmed by the impressive response you had to this work)
JUST FINISHED PLAYING PROTOVIOLENCE IN ONE SITTING AND OMG IT DID NOT DISAPPOINT!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! DEIDRE AND PAVEL MY BELOVEDS!!!!!!!!!!! what an immersive beautifully cinematic and haunting experience <3
THANK YOU!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!
This game is so special!!!! I've been dying to learn more about the malviolence world, and this did not disappoint! This team is seriously constantly pushing the envelope on making a VN experience feel full and immersive, the visuals went above and beyond, and the writing was haunting. I really enjoyed the gameplay loop of checking Deidre's different external and internal thoughts between logs. The camera movements throughout the game were so lively and impressively directed. My heart genuinely sank at multiple different points, despite ultimately knowing what the outcome was going to be. I really hope y'all make more games in this universe because there's still so much I want to know! Fantastic work!
Thank you so much for this lovely comment!
That was definitely the intent with this visual novel. When I was directing this project, I wanted the VN to have the same level of immersion I had when I was watching playthroughs of certain TYPE-MOON titles like Mahoyo or the Tsukihime Remake. While those titles are full-on visual novels, their use of dynamic camera work helps readers engage with the stories more intimately.
I'm glad this story had a compelling loop and storyline for you - and I am interested in expanding on the Violence universe in the future. ;>
Can't wait to play protoViolence!
I hope you enjoy it!!
WOW!!!!
spoilers below, maybe?
first of all if you haven't played malViolence first, do that! it's well worth your time! protoViolence is great on its own, but much better when you know a little more about what's going on!
second of all, WOW !! it's amazing what a more first-hand account of a story can give you, emotionally speaking. it's one thing to know about what happened to a character in the past, but to actually see it happen as the character is becoming more fleshed out and you learn more about where they came from and what their struggles are.... wonderful. delightful. heart wrenching.
also, great VA choice for pavel!! that one part with the drawn-out dialogue (that i don't want to go into detail about for spoiler reasons) was painful to hear (in a good way!). i have a problem sometimes where voice acting kind of takes me out of a story but both VAs did a great job!!
i'm looking forward to playing through this one again to really absorb everything, i feel like it definitely deserves another read!
anyway. cushion :)
Thank you, thank you, thank you!!
I'm really glad you enjoyed this title as much as you did, and that you're going for another read-through later.
And it's true: knowing about what happened to a certain someone is one thing, but witnessing really it is another...
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Also yes, Cushion. :)
help i stayed up until 2 am to finish reading this, so you know it's good aha >_<
i'm surprised it reads so cohesively given there are so many writers involved. you all did a fantastic job! the visual presentation is great (love the comic book style textboxes + all the various poses and expressions the characters have, it's v lively) but the story is really, really good.
this is going to be one of my fav entries for sure...
also, wah... poor pavel..... poor baby.............
i'm sad now hahaha ;;;;
Thank you so much! I'm glad you enjoyed this title as much as you did - especially in the story and visuals department. That was my team's focus for this jam project. :>
I have to give a huge thank you to Brian and cluniies for helping me keep all of our writing styles consistent. They really did do an incredible job.
And yeah... poor Pavel. ;_; I hope he resides in your heart as much as he does in mine.
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